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XVII.
(Ett, Ensam)

I am lonely,

an anxious, fearful, awkward
infant.

I talk too fast and too much and too often
and too confusingly.

I talk about things people don't understand
or don't understand what people talk about.

I avoid what others run to and
seek out what others avoid.

Who am I?


                  Who
                  am
                   I


I think I might be crazy.

I keep existing, though, somehow not
yet taken by Evolution. Is that right?
Am I a correction or a mistake?
Am I the eraser or the scribble of pencil?
I'm posting the various short poems from an autobiographical project I did last semester. They aren't amazing because I (admittedly) didn't take a lot of time on them. I'll include the description from some of them (since we had to explain them as well), but for some, I'd rather not since they are very personal.

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The subtitle of this one is important. Ett, Ensam can be roughly translated from Swedish (my favorite language) to “One, Alone.” It is short because it’s something I have a hard time explaining. When I first got to college, I felt terribly alone. I still sort of do, but not nearly as much as then. I was really hurting, and this is about how out-of-place I felt and still sometimes feel. This is also a good tie back to the original question posed -- “Who am I?”
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ThermadorianGrey Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011
The end is strong. The rest of it sounds like what it is, to be honest. An uninvested autobiographical project, and I feel like some of it might be more at home in prose than in poetry. Don't know if you've ever read Dostoevsky, but his "Notes From Underground" begins very similarly to that. I don't know if the picture associated with the poems is yours, but I like it as well.
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neoshayna888 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011
Thank you for your feedback. I admit that this one, out of all of them, is probably one of my least favorites. I completely agree that it is more prose-like, but I was such a rush at the end of the project that I didn't pay enough attention to it. I'll have to check out "Notes From Underground." I believe I've heard of it, but I've never actually gotten to read anything by Dostoevsky thus far. The image actually is my own; it's a combination of three images that are my own (except the one with a typed poem). I threw it together pretty quickly because I felt that the project should have an image to go with it, and I'm glad that you like it. It ended up working with the project overall much better than I had thought it would.

Again, thank you for your comments. I'm always open to hearing feedback from those that will take the time to give it. :)
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